feed back on my 3 rock sections :)

1/4/2012

hello! again thankyou for all the other feedback that you guys gave me for all my other sections but this time can you look through my different kinds of rock sections and see if I have to switch anything thatnkyou :)

3 Comments

Hermonie

1/4/2012 08:26:14 am

First of all I suggest that you put all the Igneous, Sedimentary, or Metamorphic stuff in one page.

I have put all my comments except specific ones the one area for example the information comments are all in information.

INFORMATION- In compaction you should add some more info otherwise I didn't see anything that needed to be added.

MEDIA- Just add a picture to the pages that do not have one and maybe a video on a few pages.

PUNCTUATION- Just go through your pages you missed a few spaces otherwise good job.

SPELLING- I didn't see any spelling errors.

CAPITALS- I think you should go through your pages and see if you can find them I only a few.

TIPS- have your font all the same

Overall great job.

Joe Joltz

1/4/2012 08:53:59 am

Igneous Rocks-

Grammar:
You have a few grammar mistakes on your main page. You have TONS of grammar mistakes on your extrusive page so make sure to fix those.

Information:
You had a good amount of information except your intrusive page was all bout cementation and some of those word I don't believe that their yours.

Capitals:
I wasn't able to find any capitalization errors.

Punctuation:
Remember to space after a period since you did forget a few times. You also added some unneeded periods so remove those.

Spelling:
Don't forget to space between words because you combined a few. Also the word Earth has a capital at the beginning. On your extrusive page you have a some spelling mistakes near the bottom.

Media:
Try to find a picture for extrusive and intrusive. If you can find videos for them all.

Sedimentary Rocks-

Grammar:
You have several grammar mistakes on your main page.

Information:
Your main page is good although your compaction page makes absolutely no sense because you always said "stuff and something." Be more descriptive. As you said for your cementation page you still need to put that into your own words.

Capitals:
I couldn't find any capital errors.

Punctuation:
Remember to put spaces after your periods and commas. On your compaction page you started a sentence with the word and.

Spelling:
You spelled the word "usually" wrong just fix that.

Media:
If you can find any videos add them in. Find a picture for your compaction and cementation sections.

Metamorphic Rocks-

Grammar:
There are quite a few places with grammar mistakes.

Information:
You have a lot of great information. Good Job!

Capitals:
You have a few unnecessary capitals.

Punctuation:
Remember to put spaces after commas and periods.

Spelling:
You spelled pressure wrong. The word Earth is capitalized.

Media:
It would be nice if you could find a video.

Overall it's really good!
:)

Dragon

1/4/2012 11:15:04 am

I have one suggestion put the pages fossils,cemenemetary and compaction on the page of sedimemtary and for the same with the pages on igenous it really saves space!

Information: your info is great!

Medida: I would suggest puting one video on each page of sedimentary, metamorphic and igenous and add more pictures on the other so it dosen't look like you did more work on just one page.

Spelling: Your spelling is great I did not see any mistakes on any of the pages. Great job!

Grammar: I really liked how well your grammar was it is really well done I did not see any mistakes. I have one suggestion to your metamorphic rock section instead of putting the questions and answers in seprate sentences why not put them in one or two sentences.

Capitals: Your capitals are very well placed I'm really impressed.

Punctuation: Your punctuation is very good as well great job!!

You have done a very well done job! Keep it up :)

feed back on my 3 rock sections :)

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